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PostPosted: Sat Jan 22, 2011 9:40 pm 
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Though this is just a rough idea critiques are much appreciated.

The story takes place the futuristic post apocalyptic like planet of Limbo where humans have become one of the top species. Our story begins with a 12 year old lad named Fai. He was abandoned as a child and adopted and raised by the Chung martial arts temple. Though only 12 years old Fai has mastered many techniques which would require years of training in such a short span of time which is why he has been chosen to journey to the holy land in the West called Aisha. The Chung temple is deteriorating and every year a a desciple is chosen to go to Aisha to become enlightened and then enlighten others in the Chung teaching, though no deciple has ever completed this quest alive the temple sees much promise in young Fai. After a hearty goodbye and some essential items provided by the temple Fai is off on his journey, however he soon encountered by a mysterious hooded figure. Cautiously Fai draws his staff, but the figure merely extends his hand and his staff bursts into flames. "The Annihalator draws near assemble your team and journey west to Aisha Dr. Morten awaits your arrival". The figure then converts the flame into a simple single edged sword and drops for Fai a small folded piece of paper, before the baffled Fai could question this figure it vanishes into thin air.

Fai continues his journey and is later confronted by a small band of bandits eyeing the simple, but finely crafted sword on him. They attempt to "bargin" him for the sword, but Fai refuses and keeps walking. Insulted the bandits attack, but are quickly beaten up and defeated by some simple martial arts moves, the thugs make a hasty retreat so hasty they drop a few of their looted items a staff being one of them. Fai picks up the staff in hopes of finding the owner along the way. While traveling Fai enounters a sleeping monkey along the road, he pokes it to see if he's alright, the monkey groggley wakes and upon seeing his staff he pounces Fai. After the minor quarel the young monkey learns that Fai did not intend on stealing his Hogun staff. Somewhat embarrased the monkey thanks Fai after apologizing and introduces himself as Sheng Li of the Li temple, Fai also introduces himself and tells him about his quest. Coincidentaly Sheng Li also wishes to journey to Aisha in hopes of being the first student of the Li temple to go there and restore honor to it aswell. Thinking back to what the hooded figure had said Fai lets Sheng Li come along with him. And thus the journey to Aisha begins.

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 Post subject: Re: Elite Sword
PostPosted: Sat Jan 22, 2011 11:01 pm 
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I'm interested. Though shouldn't this be in writers corner? But anyhow, is the hooded figure traveling with them as a sword? Or did he disappear, leaving behind a sword? This looks like it might be good. You going to be posting the story soon?


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 Post subject: Re: Elite Sword
PostPosted: Sun Jan 23, 2011 11:55 am 
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Thanks! And nope this is an idea for a comic I got some of the charecters sketched out too, the hooded figure just gave him the sword and disappeared. And hopefully I can post more soon I'm intrested myself to see how this will turn out ^^

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i wasnt aware, there's always devart though

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like I said there's always devART lol

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