I think nothing would be best. Roar was just overkill. xD

Another two pages up and we are probably only half way in this chapter....man I wrote these first chapters waaay too long....anyway the thing is dead, Ryan tries to look cool, nearly stopped drawing this comic and a big bum.....anyway enjoyah!!

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First chapters in serialized manga are always, way, WAY longer then the average chapter. You're doing fine. Keep up the good work.

True, true...but I take too long to actually get into the blasted story lol....I seem to like to write a lot of talking.......anyway, thanks for the compliment:):):):):):):):):)

The blood looks more like ink in that first picture....Idk, maybe I'm being a moron but I think that the blood would spray out more?

Everything else looks awesome as always. =]

I agree with renzo. It should be spraying out more forcefully. And I think there would be less spurting out. Besides that the movement on these pages are really fantastic. I enjoyed looking at them.

@Renzokuken and UmbertheKid: About the blood you'd probably be right....but I decided to do it like that, cos in my mind when I drew it...it was in slow motion and as anyone should know, certain things are impoosible to convey in comic book format......and anyway thanks for complimento and hopefully, I will get some pages up soon:):):):):):):):)

Slow motion? In a comic? Ooookaaayyy then. Now hurry up wit dem pages.

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARGH....Another two pages down. This is like a freakin record for me....any way, on page 27 the last panel.....IGNORE THE DRAWING COMPLETELY, FOCUS ONLY ON THE TEXT!!!!....because the drawing is completely shite........any way please enjoyah....Marmalade out....peeeace

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Oh and I changed the armour again on the Kalas'thisans.....man those kalas'thians are a bi-tch!

Uhhh, wasn't that Kreaper A LOT smaller in the previous pages?

I don't think it was a lot smaller, but probably a bit smaller.....proportioning is a big weak spot for me, when they're suppose to be really big.....that and I'm lazy and I do it how big I wont for that individual panel.................but yeah, in reality he's suppose to be that big its the other panels I drew him wrong.......damn perspective crap..

No, in 24 & 25, he looks large but yeah he is just slightly larger in this recentmost post.

just slightly larger?

in the page where it gets shot with arrows, the arrows are to him like they would be to an average sized human

Yeah the proprotions definitely made me pause for a second. But I understand how hard that stuff is to pull off so no worries. You see where you messed up and that's improvement right there.

Here's a little special page, I did this cos the next two pags will probably take a bit for me to finish so I thought I'd put this up as a gift. I want to redo it, or improve on the shading...so when I finish that I'll change this one to the better one. Any way, the girl is Natalay, a character sen later in the series and yeah its ripped off from the painting, 'American Gothic' and I've called the piece, 'American Steampunk'......so anyway stay tuned for more kreapers and Merry Christmas to those that cellebrate it:):):):):):):):):)