Hi guys, it's my first time posting in this section. I hope to get some opinions just like my thread in the Art section. I would also appreciate it if you support to the opinions so I can pinpoint what I need to improve. The story is more into romance, mystery and action. It also doesn't have a title anymore since I found out that the name was already taken by a movie (not too sure if that's fine ^^' ).

Title: Rose Without Thorns
A war between the Angelink and Nosferatus wages on as one of the four families, the Rosenmyr, of the Nosferatus gets assassinated. Sabin, a loyal subject to the Rosenmyr, is on the run believed to be the murderer. Entering the border of the Angelinks, Sabin meets Mina Hutter, a strong-willed and kind girl, who will decide his fate as Angelink soldiers search for him around the run downed town of Kindrel.

Here is page1:
I haven't added any text yet but if I did, then it would say:
"Within war is corruption..." [probably at the top right]
"And within corruption..." [top left maybe]
"is vengeance..." [close to the eye at the bottom]

You got my interest. I can't really tell you anything yet though. I would need to read more.

Your pictures are good, but this is way too rough.

I guess I need to put more time into making the next one then... ><'

This seems quite interesting More details would be a great help, I'm not really sure what to say much about the story.

As for the page, is it just a sketch? I'm guessing so. I don't think you'd like this just to be a sketch manga kind of a thing right? Well I guess I just want to see it inked Hope you find the time to do so

The title will be "Rose Without Thorns". I felt that the name suits the story since I plan on having it a romance, mystery and action. What do you think? ^^

Makes me more curious about what happens in the story

hmm you got me interested too. I demand moar XD

Sorry guys but I have to postpone making the manga for now ><. I'm still learning a bit of the basics and I think I kinda rushed too much into making the manga.